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OMFG I'm so happy I could cry! (I do that sometimes)

You just made my day!

*runs off to read*

And yes, in regards to the story itself I have included all posts from everyone, set at size 12, first line indented, one line space and arial font - hence the size to be anal about it (I do that sometimes too; be fussy). I like to sit back and scroll through sometimes when I'm "bored"... hellafun, really.

Now I'll go read, even if it is short, and look forward to the rest when y'all get round to it. Did you say it's Labor Day there? I have no idea what that means over here Down Under but I'm gonna say happy (belated most prolly) Labor Day, nod, smile politely and back out of the room ;)

TY. TTYL. Oh and shame on you too, not making mention of the 9th page in the usual fashion! *lol* It's almost become mandatory now, has it now? *tsk-tsk* Slipping my dear?

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DP - APU Really *shrugs*


Wow, did you say short? *lol* That was more than I was expecting - and I mean that on more than one level. I'm so relieved literally to have Rae back @ The Park that it seemed literal reading that update; a physical sigh of relief. Kudos. And the way you handled Rae and Trinity's "re-union" I thought was superb. TBH I was in a few minds as I thought about what I was going to do if I were to write it, but yours is far more workable. And I can so very much work with this, absolutely. Trinity's view of Tai was oh so cute - I'm guessing now only she and Rae really know who/what he is (handy, he'd be outcast or worse I think if anyone else really knew, though I AM surprised at least Dean didn't make that connection between Tai and Taijitsu but he can be excused with Sam's arrival not to mention his mixed emotions towards Trinity and Jonathan at the moment).


I was wondering how you were going to have Dean and Sam interract. That was a little game of mine throwing you a curve ball to see what you could do with it wink.gif. Though I can honestly say I was not surprised by Dean's reaction at all it DOES make me wonder (of course) what's really going on with him/inside his head as a character. He's complex when you break it down, isn't he? Hmm. And was it just me but am I over-analysing Dean's reaction with Tai (and inadvertently Rae)?

Finishing with my second sleeve, she looked up with a pained smile, squeezed my hand, and went back to Tai and Dean, who were both still too involved with the story to notice her right away. When Tai did see her, he tugged on her hand excitedly, straining out his closest approximation of ‘mom’ and apparently trying to get her up to speed on what was going on in Dean’s fantasy land. Dean himself grinned at her broadly – I couldn’t remember the last time I’d seen him so happy. I hadn’t exactly pegged him for a kid person, but he certainly seemed to be.

Am I seeing the start of a new 'alliance' here/beginnings of a post-apocalyptic "nuclear" family (3/4s) or are they just happy to have familiar faces around again? I read that above with the biggest grin creeping out. I'd never expected that. Tai's arrival IS a great catalyst for 'changing' these relationships in whatever fashion - and that was a great moment. Still grinning like an idiot because I'm intrigued now to see where it goes (if anywhere) but I can tell you from my (writing) perspective Rae's got things to work with now, so yay! XD


And wow. When I read Trinity's reaction to Dave's absence I laughed. I was shocked until I realised her opinions were more than validated. The only person he'd ever cared for was Rae and the only relationships he had with the rest were like soldiers on the battlefield. Trinity's opinion was more than justified, even if it shocked me a little, but I get why. It's also fun to read another's perspective of a character they didn't write which helps me to see things in new ways. How Rae sees Dave is of course different to how Trinity saw him... but have you ever stopped to wonder was there something between Trinity and Dave (being so alike) that neither one recognised? I alude of course to that scene we keep touching on but never explore; Trinity at the river bank outside The Park. Dave never explained what happened in detail and Trinity never knew. I always flirted with the idea something happened there that effects these two that we never explored and now he's gone all we have really is conjecture. Did he save her? Did he attack her? Did she know him or he know her? If you scroll back (I have been lately) to teh start you'll see a pattern emerging, perhaps subconsious, between Trinity and David's behaviour to one another. He claims to have saved her (albeit to "mate with"/impregnate) but has never once looked at her with any kind of love or trust or sense of loyalty to her as he did in whatever form with Rae (as much as he always denied his feelings for her as well). Like I said, maybe I'm just over-analysing (I do this a lot, I just came from Lit class) but I'm wondering if Trinity knows, can't or doesn't want to remember her past and is just blocking everything out? I don't know, I'm just thinking aloud. I'm over-analysing everything at the moment - like why Dean's suddenly so 'family-oriented' and I can't remember him ever caring for anything other than Trinity (unless of course it's a ploy to get a reaction from Trinity, to make her jealous, but even I don't know if Dean is quite that mean, he's truly a dark-horse that one). God knows.


Am wondering though what the future holds in store for poor Jonathan. Man was a nut before this latest turn of events, how the hell he comes through this let alone in what manner is beyond me - and that's half the fun, isn't it? Guessing!


Anyway, yeah loving it all so far as always and I could rant more but time's up in the computer labs so I gotta run! Look forward to more! (I may work on some behind the scenes stuff anyway, getting Rae's reaction to what you've already written because it's inspirational stuff!) - so yup, good stuff! biggrin.gif

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RE your first post: Aww, that's the reaction I was hopin' for biggrin.gif And as for Labor Day - pff, I'm not even sure what it's supposed to be celebrating, all I know is my mom got off work, my brother got out of college, and since I'm homeschooled I still had to do it *sigh*

Other stuff: I'm putting Dean's obliviousness about Tai down to the fact that he is a guy, and they (the ones I hang around with at least) rarely notice names. Heck, he probably hasn't even thought "Where'd this kid come from anyway? And hey, why's he call Rae 'mum'?" Then, yeah, there is the whole bit with Sam, and he's kind of trying to be a leader, but the role doesn't seem to really suit him. He's more at home playing with the kid *lol* He's just a big kid himself sometimes, it seems to me. Then again he could also be picking up on Trinity's sudden desire for kids and trying to send her a message? wink.gif Like you said, who knows.

At all the analytical stuff over Trinity and David - wow. I never thought a bit of that. Um.

(I may work on some behind the scenes stuff anyway, getting Rae's reaction to what you've already written because it's inspirational stuff!)
Ooh, ooh, ooh! Do it!

I'm being run off the computer now, but in closing - I posted the rest, and, offtopic: lmao.gif at my quote in your sig. Liked that did ya?

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True all that (maledom) though I had Dean asking something along the lines of 'Where's his parents/where'd you find him?' about Tai and Rae's vague albeit tentative anser 'They're gone' so at least in my mind Dean doesn't see any literal connection, he just thinks Rae's picked up a stray of sorts XD


And as for him being a kid, you're right. There's a line in your latest post (I forget, I'm rushing to post this on limited time) where Dean's basically returned to his normal witty self (you're right, he does get the best lines doesn't he?) I thought Trinity's stubbornness was well drafted. Her growing 'insanity' (hearing voices, seeing ppl etc) is worriesome, but given the environment and past cicumstances rather understandable. I'm wondering of course where she's headed - is she willing this state in some blind alliance/attempt at empathy/sypmathising with the devil (in Jonathan here) and in a way is not all that dissimilar to Rae's continual defence of David that had all the earmarks of the Stockholm Syndrome, (poor traumatised wench) that Trinity apparently noticed with Rae but doesn't want to admit to in herself. Says a lot about the shifting dynamic now between the sexes of the remaining survivors, doesn't it, when the line begins to blur (woo! Unashamed NIN reference! XD) between protector, provider and psychopath XD - Isn't it funny to note that in this post-apocalyptic world how 'crazy' has almost become the norm/acceptable? Scary thought indeed; the end of social order, that... No wonder they're all a little 'off balance' 'eh? wink.gif


In regards to David and Trinity *shrug* They're just a lot alike I think/thought, except one was more aware of it perhaps. Doesn't matter now, does it? *snuffle* God help me, I actually miss his surly presence more than I anticipated. Dagnammit. So much for wanting a change... No matter. We'll see how far we can go without him... *panicked face*


*eep*


Aaand yes I have been (trying) to write at the mo. I have a few pages done up so far. Will try and get that done as soon as possible. Am just supervising a friend at the moment with her exams (she's studying at home as well) so when that's done I'll head back to my computer and work on it some more. If all goes to plan it will be up by tonight, tomorrow at the latest. Keep you posted.


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As for your quote in my sig, yeah. Though I 'know' (I assume more correctly) that the real life man would actually be against old-lady kneecapping (he's not a pacifist by any extreme but he's UberJewish in the respect of the elderly, even anti-abuse of women, there's a humaniraian lurking behind that pissed off facade) the reference to it still makes me chuckle. He's probably got a twisted sense of humor. Heard his Happy Gilmore impersonation? 'Are you too good for your home?!' It's very... cute. So did I like your statement? Of course! I appreciate it on many levels. But this is David we're talking about, David, random acts of senseless violence, and him finding amusement/happiness (even if through someone else's suffering). Seriously, what's not to love about that? *insert evil laughter here*







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DP:

If you're reading this Jess I haven't forgotten. I have about 20 pages done so far, just have to add a bit more to push it forward a bit before I post. Shouldn't be too much longer. Trying to make up for my absence with longer update. Plus... trying to get back into the 'zone' again. Bear with me smile.gif

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Have read, have started on my post but it's tiny so far. My internet access has been negligible this weekend, so I read the first half and copied out the second, then ended up wishing I'd gotten the whole thing. Um. Too much noise here to think of anything pertinent to say so I'll shut up now and go copy. If I think of anything later I suppose I'll edit.

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^ Sounds good. Good luck (with noise) =)

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** DP

Just read. Will work on mine laters. Kudos =)

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***TP

Have started update but to be honest may not have much finished by the time you log back in. If you wish to continue then by all means feel free. I'm forcing it at the moment and I think the post quality is suffering really. I'm going to leave it up to you to decide what you want to do. If you wish to post before me that's fine. If not you may have to wait a few more days before you get something read-worthy from me. Sorry.

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I can wait. TBH right now I'm a little at a loss - I wish I hadn't rushed my last post. My laptop ran out of battery power right before where I ended up stopping, so all the momentum I'd worked up in myself kind of went to waste (and as a result I stayed up all night and, yay, got to see the sunrise.) Next morning I gave the screen a blank look, banged on a few keys and saved it to be posted. Shouldn't've, but, it's out there now. Maybe it'll help you out to know kind of where my head was at back then, some of the possible ideas I had:


Dean was able to convince Rae he wasn't dangerous. Daresay she's still going to have some doubts about him, though, no matter what he said. She could've had any reason for coming into the Rec Room just then, or --

Dean wasn't able to convince her, and she's now decided that between him and Trinity, Jonathan's instability, and Tera being basically an unknown, she and Tai aren't safe at the Park anymore. She was going to the Rec Room to get some food for the journey, or --

Dean didn't even try. Despite his promise to Trinity, he just stared at Rae for a while and then ran off. Again, don't know what she's been up to - talking to Tera perhaps? - or her reason for coming to the Rec Room; could be --

Whatever happened with Dean, Rae's been alone in her hut with Tai or talking with Tera or whatever, when for some odd reason Tai starts tugging her towards the Rec Room. I liked this idea best. Kind of makes it seem like the kid knows something's going on with Trinity, be it simple heightened senses or some psychic connection. Plus, I'm intrigued by possible interactions between Jonathan and Tai. On the subject of Jonathan --

Quite simply, maybe he's 'sane' again and maybe he's not. I can absolutely see him slipping under again, or just going psycho and attacking someone out of nowhere. On the other hand he seems rational for now, and he'll probably figure he needs to win over Rae, and the best way to to that would be to win over Tai. Thing is, I really don't see him as a person who likes kids too much. It'd probably be funny to watch him try, especially since Tai's not exactly a normal kid.


Anyways, that's about all I thought of. Hope maybe that gives you some ideas, or some inspiration at least.

EDIT: Here's something funny - while typing this post my frickin' laptop died again. I've got to keep a better eye on that battery level ...

-- Edited by Jess on Saturday 26th of September 2009 06:21:43 AM

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^ Completely off-topic - OMFG I LOVE his smile! Look at that! 0.0
Wow. Now that's nice.
*sigh*


Okay, back on topic *lol*

A HUGE thanks from me for that above post because TBH I was floundering (this is what I get for getting my head too far out of the zombie realm and stuck in a different dimension (RP)). I had tried writing something (anything) and it didn't seem to go anywhere - it was very disheartening to say the least. Now that I have some direction (sad when I need someone else to think for me, isn't it? But you must be pyschic as opposed to plain old psychotic XD becuase I sorely needed that push) I can actually get my head back into the game. That's the game plan anyway.

I'm still not 100 percent sure exactly what to do yet plot wise, but you do bring up a few interesting points. Dean's and/or Jonathan's relationship with Tai for one thing - I feel I can exploit this (and intend to *insert evil laughter here*) but under wht guise is anyone's guess. Hmm.

Oh and that thing with your laptop *shakes head*
All I can do is laugh.
Good luck with that is all I can really say!


By the way how was sunrise for a vampire such as yourself? *giggles*


Hoping to get something up soonish. Have a report due tuesday I havent even started yet. Trying to enjoy the last 2 days of my holidays. Pfft. Went so damned fast! *sobs*

OH and before I forget - yay for inserting another TPA quote in your sig. Aww, David. Has a way with kids, doesn't he? *lol* You have an eye for the catchy liners don't you? wink.gif

Thanks again =)

-- Edited by Ravynlee on Sunday 27th of September 2009 12:05:45 PM

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* DP

I know I've been slack lately but truth is I think I needed a break. Was burnt out of ideas, and even your suggestions wene't helping, though I did try. I haven't written anything that's remotely post-worthy, so I'm afraid I'll be disappointing you again this week. I've just finished a paper today and have another due Monday so I'm going to be hard pressed for the next few weeks coming up to exams. If you're happy to wait I'll see how I'm feeling during all this study and such, and if I get re-inspired I'll post something up. Other than that if you wish to keep going I'd be more than happy to read and post feedback. You could always have Rae and Tai leave again temporarily while the rest try and work out their dynamics and leave room for me to jump back in when I'm ready. Thyat's up to you.
Anyway sorry, again, lame and late I know, but after coming this far I'd hate to ruin it by posting rushed half-hearted updates. I'd rather sit and wait out the storm. I'll admit it is helping me at the moment getting away from this completely, and no not at that other RP site I had tagged, but a new one. That's fun and vastly different from this and it doesn't take up half as much concentration and time. I think I needed to clear my head. And in truth I need to write David back in (or you can do it for me). Damnit I miss his attitude. Place never felt the same without him *lol*

So, hopefully this doesn't piss you off too much, but understandably I expect you'll be upset. Note I didn't say I'm quitting, just stepping back for a bit until something hits me. When that happens (and it will, you know I can't help myself) I'll notify you and work my way back in. We'll see what happens anyway.

Thanks and yeah... best of luck with... all of it.

BTW I'm still onsite so I'm not going anywhere - just... you know what I mean ;)
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Aw. All right. Honestly what makes this fun for me is the back-and-forth of it - having always had writing as a sheerly personal pursuit - so I doubt I'll continue in yoru absence. Been fun. Hope you can get back into it smile.gif

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^ God I hope so.
I knew getting rid of my angry persona (David) was going to kill me - I just didn't think it would be this literal!
I promise though I won't leave it open-ended like this. I will be back. Let me get my sh*t together first.



On a side note, don't know whether you're into it or not (or have the time, or care) but I've been having an absolute blast at this site OUR TOWN. It's a nice way to keep me writing without having to dedicate 16-20 pages at a time (which I can't help but do story format) so it's perfect time-wise. Unlike the first RP site I was linking (Exit155) this one actully moves *lol* and what's better for me, I'm a pr*ck in it, which really helps - I'm not the damsel in distress anymore. And I like it.

So if you're bored while waiting for me to come back in here, that's where you'll find me. If you're curious look for 'Shane'. You'll figure the rest out in good time I'm sure *insert evil laughter here*

Thanks Jess smile.gif

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Ok, apparently I lied, I have been typing like crazy. I re-did my last post (since I wasn't ever really satisfied with it) and it grew an insane amount. I'll post it on up for your reading pleasure if you'll delete the old one.

I've got plaaaaaans. And they do include an easy way to bring David back in, so unless you've gotten back into it by then (doubt it, since I'm goin' pretty fast) I'll do that.

Limited time right now. Talk this weekend.

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OMG OMG OMG I could KISS you if it weren't against site policy - and virtual familial limitations! *cries with joy* I'm so STOKED to hear that, you've got no idea... and yes this emphasis is necessary, it's how I'm speaking aloud to myself, so added inflection is necessary - you just made me the happiest chick this side of... well let's just stop at happy.

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Cant wait! And NOW I finally have my own net back on (I've spent the last 4 or so months living on a 20mb plan of Chris') I've actually got no limitations as I've had of recent. I feel a change in the wind... and as for David - I implore you - please PUT HIM BACK IN! *lol*

*does happy dance - and I just had coke and chocolate so no foolin'*

Will make with the deleting and pave the way for more goodness to continue.

Thanks Jess! *kissyfaces*


EDIT: Your old 'purge post' deleted - please tell me that was what you wanted me to do and I didn't screw something up...?

-- Edited by Ravynlee on Thursday 8th of October 2009 02:13:44 PM

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*lol* Wow Ma, chill out, you might give yourself a heart attack or somethin' (oh, I must be feeling mean, disregard that *ahem*)

Okay, like I said before, this is basically what the other post could've\should've been, and would've probably been if I hadn't rushed myself and killed my laptop. I also went ahead and furthered the story, covered (in vague terms) Dean's excuse and whatnot, blah blah blah, finished the night off. I like ending with Trinity going to sleep. Sometimes it's the only way I can get any sleep *grumble* Anyway I have several things already written -- importantish stuff, blood and gore because I like it, plain-and-simple straight dialouge to be used in conversations at some point -- and most of it I want to go ahead and use now to get it out of my system. I've got Davey triumphant (um, kind of triumphant) return done, but it's going to close out my little outburst here, so sorry. You'll have to wait :p And we've got Dean attacking Jonathan again, presumably because the little b*tch deserved it (poor guy's "the little b*tch" in my head now; weird story *lol*), and Rae rising to authority and putting them in their places.

So yeah, fun stuff ahead. Apologies for any typos in here, I'm a little hyper for some reason right now so I can't concentrate of jack for any length of time, hence my sentences are getting longer because I forget when they started.


Now the important part. Where's my Daddy in you sig\av? *cries* I miss hiiiiiiiim laughing.gif


EDIT: Oh and I'm trying to check out that site right now, but due to aforementioned attention span complication it's proving quite difficult. So I'm probably goint to just spam it up here at least until I calm down. Weeeeee.

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Oh I have to admit reading that was cute... yes you had some read aloud 'aww' moments - but that comment after the fact had me laughing louder. Seriously, you convey this same inner conflict so well between Trinity and Jonathan sometimes they read like an extension of the same person - and wouldn't that be a scary thought? (especially after this talk of possible future progeny) XD

The explanation Rae gave regarding Dean's "shift" of persona too was spot-on. You wrote and justified that a lot more succinctly than I had (attempted) so kudos for that. And Tai and Jonathan, I'm sorry but their intteractions were also out-aloud 'aww' moments too. I'm worried about Dean (weird, I know, that little surly motor-mouth resplendant with bad attitude and shorter fuse who actually isn't a criminal that we know of) and wondering of course where he's run off to. That man has some serious issues... then again, who doesn't?

I'm curious to see Dave's return and how that, if at all, impacts on the newly developing Park dynamic. I'd love to say I'm keen to write it but at the moment you'll have to forgive me, I'm on hiatus with David (long story, short attention span XD) at least in terms of character/development. When I come back at some point I'm going to have a blast with what you've done and still doing, I can see it. Eagerly looking forward to the next round of posts of course. Have to admit reading that gave me a warm fuzzy feeling inside - and no, it wasn't gas.

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Oh and as for your 'daddy' (at the risk of clogging this one up with spam related stuffage) I'll leave that for another thread ;). In the meantime aquaint yourself with Jared in my sig, aka "Sam." Play nice, children. Hahaha.

-- Edited by Ravynlee on Sunday 11th of October 2009 02:14:36 PM

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Mind if I bounce some thoughts off you here? *assumes you said "of course, favorite daughter, go ahead"* Awesome biggrin.gif

Right now I'm coddling the scene \ sequence of posts that leads up to David's re-entry. To me it's a fairly climactic thing, and of course those are my favorite things (like Dean's game and Jonathan's entrance, in totally different ways), and I want to dawdle on it as long as I can. Unfortunately that means my level of attention for the tamer, more "boring" lead-in scenes kinda goes down. I have two mornings and I don't know what to do with them. Evenings are covered - probably because to me the situation sitting around the dinner table is just such a breeding ground for tension - it's like the little communal dinners are one of the last remnants of polite society, and though they're clinging to it, the effects of the outside world put a serious strain on things. Not to mention the fact that half of them don't even like the other half, and having to share a meal with each other is frustrating.

Anyway my basic conundrum is this: I'm impatient with the pace. I have several ideas for Trinity - in her current more-or-less immortal state I can't do anything new with her, really; I have a plot for bringing her down to Earth, so to speak, but right now I can't put it into action. It's nothing that can be squeezed into a couple mornings, and besides I think it's deserving of its own slot instead of just being a filler. So it has to wait until after the big mash-up, but at this rate there's going to be some amount of superficial fluff mixed in with these three scenes I've written that I really like. This is a problem I've always had actually: I get infatuated with one scene or section and anything leading up to it becomes "boring" to me, hence I never get anything done. If I didn't have the OCD compulsion telling me I have to cover every freakin' second of every freakin' day, I might fare better. The Park has been good for me in that I don't have to cover everything, knowing that between the two of us, nothing will be left out.

So - I have these two mornings and I don't know what to do with them. My proposal is that I just leave them alone, much as the OCD tells me not to, and let you work with them when you join back in if it suits you. All the characters can go their separate ways, get lost in their work, whatever. I'll be as vague as I possibly can. I'll be able to get things done again, you'll have more room to play if you want. I still hate leaving basically blank spots, but.

One other thing. Plus Davey, we're up to eight characters, which is ironic considering we made the decision to cut off Amy and co. and try for a smaller, more manageable 'cast.' And when you read through it, Tera really might as well not be there - she's really not much of a character at all. Yeah. I'm suggesting slimming our numbers again. Not only her, but also either Dean or Jonathan one, because much as I love'em, having them in the same environment is just causing more and more bad vibes. The rest of the group's going to have had enough of it eventually.


Well. Anyways. That's all. Needed to get the rambling out of my system I guess; when I can't actually write, I tend to write about writing *lol* But I will stubbornly insist that all this is relevant, every last word. Maybe. Kinda. At any rate, without some kind of direction, I'm not sure how long I can keep the Park alive. I'm still fascinated with the people and the scenario and everything, I guess it's just that since I can no longer look forward to your contributions, it's not as much fun as it was *shrug*

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LMAO I'm sorry I read all that with a serious face then got to the quote in your sig and burst out laughing. So much for attentiveness *lol again* *Ahem*

Okay, guilty as I still may be about the lack of contribution to said Park, I have a few weeks to go, namely as of 14th November I'm oficially free and on holidays, so after that point I don't see why I can't rejoin you. Having 3 stories going at once is quite a feat, but as much as I love the Park the break has done me the world of good, creatively. Yes I am in love with RP. It's far easier in my current situation to write 300 words than 16 pages, and with the Park you damn well know as well as I do that even with good intentions of not ranting once we get in the zone with TPA all we do is rant. Right now I can't rant. But I will. Just give me like a few more weeks, pretty-please *puppy dog eyes*
So I'm hoping bottom line you simply just don't give up.
Hmm.

As for the rest I have ideas that I had been planning at working towards AFTER Dave's re-entry. For the meantime I agree with culling down numbers. And ironically I was going to do that with Tai. You may find that strange but I have it in mind Tai will reach a point, bloodlust if you will, AFTER he's kind of learned all he needs to 'funtion' as a person and then suddenly goes to turn on Rae. Someone will intervene and kill him. This will bring the group a bit closer together I think, especially if there are heavy losses from Tai's hybrid rampage. As fun as he is as a kid, he's a dead-weight on my (Rae's) side and clouding her judgement. Maybe she herself will kill him and thus cement herself as a new kind of person. That'd be cool. Going from damsel to Demi Moore wannabe *lol* but you get the idea.

I agree with you with getting rid of Tera. If not by Tai perhaps then we could have her found dead and spread disharmony amongst the ranks. As much as I love Dean and Jonathan's squabbles I have a soft spot for Dean - I can't help it, I don't like Jonathan *giggles* seeing as how he's unbalanced and just creepy, BUT logically Dean is overkill. Trinity has already proven she and Dean cannot co-exist together in the one place for too long without dramas. If anyone leaves it would probably have to be Dean and for the love of me I don't want him to, he is our comic relief, and with David's eventual return we'll have the brooding mouthpiece criminal back too, which makes Jonathan overkill as well... The solution to this of course is to somehow 'humanise' Trinity. What if she suffers at Tai's hands? Yes they have an animal rapport but key word of course is animal, this could be territorial, and she could suffer heavy blood loss and need someone HUMAN to give a transfusion. Maybe Jonathan might give his life to save her and go out a hero, Trinity survives with some part of Jonathan inside of her always (and you can develop that as you want) AND we get to see Trinity in a new light - if the blood is the key to her infection, such a drastic loss as to warrant her almost dead or officially dead might be the only way to cure her, maybe not entirely but enough. This would in essence allow Dean to stay as now the hybrid and he and Trinity will now have a new dynamic to their relationship. There is a question of course that given the fact Trinity survived death too many times she would arguably bounce back from a near total blooed out. We could argue that's exactly the point; she has endured too much and reached the limit of her 'powers.' Her immunity is shot. She should die. But a human sacrifice (especially if she refuses Dean's blood over Jonathan's) might pull her through. Just a thought of course ;)

As for mornings... this is not overly difficult. Considering not much time has passed since arrival Rae will be working towards getting the place up and running again. You could easily keep her distracted in her old hut, ruminating over old memories of David thinking he's dead, and she won't want anyone to see her in such a vulnerable state because she knows no one mourns him but her. She's easy.

You know, if you give me a lead in I could probably try and squeeze in a few hundred words between your posts to help you out, at least from Rae's POV. I had been tossing up a kind of triangle myself between Rae, Sam and Dave but have decided to go against it. Dave would kill the other guy, no question, and besides that we've already got enough of that going on with Trinity and co. Doesn't mean I can't milk it til Dave gets back at least wink.gif
Unfortunately Sam might yet die but at the moment it's a new vessel for me to work with upon my return that's not same-old, same-old. Between us we basically have 4 characters each. If we kull down it might make posting generally easier for all concerned.

Anyway, I agree with the rant you posted. Worthwhile to the last full-stop. I do miss the brainstoming sessions, considering you and this story was what spun me off in the direction of RP anyway, so I owe you a debt of gratitude for this and that! Bless ya lil cotton-socks *awww* And for the record don't let anyone (like Sarah for instance ;)) tell you any different - you're my fav and have been for quite some time. So I'm not a strict Draimanist anymore, doesn't mean I'm not extolling Draimanist virtues *lol* Try and hold on a few more weeks and I'll be back in full ranting mode. Wait and see wink.gif

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