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I Walk Alone

I am here.
All alone.
I am not here.
All alone.

Wherever I am.
I seem to be alone.
Whenever I am.
I seem all alone.

In death or bright life
I am always empty.
Awake or in slumber.
I still lack life.

Happy or sad.
Don't move me.
Angry or hurt.
You're moving me.

Stop it!
I hear myself screaming.
I block my ears.
And shut my eyes.

Stop it!
But it keeps happening.
It keeps me moving.
It keeps me breathing.

Stop it!
Force the demon outside.
Through my bloodied wrists.
Through my liver bile.
It's not coming out.

Dammit! Just stop it!
I was here not to be played.
I was here to live.
Stop it! These voices live.

Take everything from inside.
Because it doesn't matter.
My voice of reason.
Isn't enough to stop it.


God Bless Us Everyone
We are a broken people living under a loaded gun

Dreamer of Art


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You expressed emotion better than well, but I think you still need to work on the way it progresses. The start was simple and I would've hoped that the whole thing was simple and less desperate towards the end. Either make the start more complex or the whole thing simple (and effective). Anyhow, nice work, though I'm sure you can do better. wink



Dreaming of Zion, Awake
Sleeping Awake.

"We’ve never tried to come off as better than our fans, our fans... when they come to see us play, they’re actually a part of, you know, us playing. Sonny, the way he is on stage, he connects with them, emotional and in every kind of way you can imagine, you know, musically, and I think that they can see that it’s not, you know, a put on, it’s not something that’s fake, it’s real." -
Mark Daniels of P.O.D.

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