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Introduction

Screms filled alley's and streets , all the panic running faded by the small
villagers that faded , when tanks and men in Uniform held those by gun threathing those to be killed . Even those that wore a star of david were killed or taken.

Rumor or bragging soldiers had said things about their captors , how they made them strip and sit in the cold as they got a buzz cut . And given 2 days worth of water , and a slice of bread or a browned banana for there week or even month apart meal.

The prisoners even lost so much weight some died , many got sick some even died of illness of family history , heart problems . Liver or kidney problems or even Diabiets.

The reign of Hitler would end with people thinking he died by his own men that plotted against him.


Tragedy (chap 1)

When she walked in , it was almost like time stopped and all men died at the sight of Ann frank , she was beautiful.

She was beatuiful and nice ,its hard to recall much from 1944 in Germany. That year and season alot of people died or even killed themselfs to escape the hell they were in at that moment.

But Ann frank was different , she was more mature then most girls her age. She even kept brave no matter how worse it got through the years in the camp.

All day we were put to work , we'd rake the dirt ,or clean the soldiers uniform or even bath the soldiers and sometimes polish their shoes. We even were denied blankets and only wore thin black and white P.J like outfits , with shoes that had a hole or two and never were allowed to wear socks ever.

Sometimes everyone would go a month sometimes several weeks without food or water,if we lacked in our work or failed to finsh or back talked the soldiers that stayed in the camp with us.

The soldiers would sometimes call us names such as "***" or "Wh**e" or tell us we would be better off dead.

There was only one time we ,met Hitler, he was ugly and a F**king Bast**D,I and everyone else remembers his words that day we met.

Hitler " Kill those who backtalk or even try to practice their jewish religion or even try to kiss the same sex or even attempto to stash food or water"

everyone that day cried , but Ann she went about her day with a high head and even tried to pass her courage to others in our camp.

Ann knew when the soldiers lessend when it happend , is when she would pray to her god asking him to forgive Hitler for what he is doing to the world.

Her courage always gave me or even a few handful of prisoners here in the camp hope.

Fear (chap 2)

A few years in the camp changed a few of us , I could tell Ann's hope was wearing down ,but she manged to keep a journal at teh camp she would write a few days at a time , I saw Ann as an angel , she was special.

Our hope slowly returend when the russian army was fighting back against the nazi's and attempt to rescue us. Ann said " We are strong , We can grow from this experience " some of us cheered quietly , so we didnt get in trouble.

Some of us , half the night as bombs and gun fire went on late into the night,Sometimes a few of us have over heard the soldiers plotting against Hitler ,when a few days later Hitler's cabin exploded , many believed he died in the explosion , b ut fo rsome reason I didnt believe he die , but those in the camp were freed and returned to their families.

Ann would never see her family again , She died in the camp last month , after her hope speech. Durning the time the russians arrived to save us, her dad cried as he mourned her loss.

I kept her journal safe and gave him her journal and he said " Thank you , Sir "
I nodded and went to restart my life after along time in the camp.

For those who believed he died , had no bodyh or sign he died , If he died he would of been all over the walls and ceiling of his cabin, Or so I thought.

Moment of truth (chap 3)

1989 , Dec 1st

A newspaper came out saying that a man that claimed he was Aldofe Hitler died , during a late night in a hospital from a poker game gone werong , He had died of a lethal gunshot wound to the neck.

This news shocked the nations of America and the counties, That affected by the war Hitler started.

My nbame is Will , I died in 1987 , Though its my ghost or known as Earth bound spirit is telling you the story.

The moral of the story is what I saw and how in some sense was friends with Ann Frank . And How I was right , Hitler didnt die back in 1946.

Since Hitler , The world was and remained changed forever , till the end of the world.

WE are not perfect or normal we are flawed in our own ways. And no one can forget WWll and how it affected those people in hiding and fear of dying and never seeing their families again.

My history be a lesson of not letting hate or anger control your actions or behavior .

I thank you for listening to the story you heard...

The End

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I love this theme, odd as it may sound and with all due respect intended. So I had been meaning to get around to this as soon as I saw it. I have to admit, it is a little bit confusing in that it seems to change perspective at some points, but its flow is good, easy to read and quite sharp, meaning it's delivery packs an impact. There's little "waffle" (added words to over-inflate sentences that don't really need it) which is a wonderful thing to achieve if you can pull it off - which you have (I wish you could teach me, I waffle myself silly in literary tems). I'd suggest spell check and of course editting the swear words to at least give us an indication what they mean if you want the audience to get the full affect. Other than that interesting turn of events near the end. All in all quite good. Readable and good. Well done =)

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thank yee , Ravynlee

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