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Ravynlee · ~ ModMother / The Cougar ~ 290

RE: The Park: Apocalypse

Jess · V.I.P 260

I haven't added his [Nick's] name to the map because lord knows how much longer he'll be alive or what the future holds for him.
Hahah! Just waitin' for an excuse to kill him off, are we?

So right now everyone's gone except 'Trinity' and an unknown nameless-faceless. This should be fun

On a side note, Congratulations to the Park story thread for reaching its second page! And yes, the text is bright red in anticipation off all the bloodspill. You can take the girl out of the horror movie, but...

-- Edited by Jess on Sunday 3rd of May 2009 02:52:53 AM

Jess · V.I.P 260

Post finished, finally. Broke it in two - the second one's mainly dialouge. Left it wide open for the next poster, I think

Ravynlee · ~ ModMother / The Cougar ~ 290

Read and loved it. Working on another update as we speak. Just getting some inspiration with some legendary George A. Romero

CancerCowboy · Senior Member 0

will hopefully write my next part soon. i have a small idea but nothing too great. Will try to work it in to the Park so I can be a part of the mani story

Ravynlee · ~ ModMother / The Cougar ~ 290

^ Looking forward to it =)

Brendan · Member 10

Hope my contribution was okay. In case you're wondering... there's more to the ending of my post coming soon. Don't assume I'm... gone.

Ravynlee · ~ ModMother / The Cougar ~ 290

It was brilliant! I was sorry to see it end - but now you've left us (me) on a cliffhanger - no fair! *pouts* My mind's firing with possibilities - how the hell are you going to survive this I wonder?

Looking forward to the rest of course. And kudos on the mention of a car, not even sure if it's the one DL/Jason's driving or the one we (my character Rae) had been on, or another one completely, but was still a nice subconscious little tie in, well done =)

Jess · V.I.P 260

Nice posts guys - now the question is, who posts next? (Just want to make sure no one's waiting on anyone.)

Ravynlee · ~ ModMother / The Cougar ~ 290

I'm not waiting on anyone. I can write my posts from where I left it without running into too much trouble. Jess, if you want I can write 'Dean' in - or at least a lead up to gunfire and then the old cliffhanger of 'spotting emerging from the distance/darkness' but if you have something else in mind feel free to write it and I'll write around you. Providing no one kills my two characters off in their posts I can generally work off anything that someone else writes that Rae and David say or do. No biggie.

Yes Brendan has more coming but again the rest of us can work around him until he writes himself in or mentions us, same with Pete. No hold up here, just preoccupied

Jess · V.I.P 260

Ravynlee wrote:

I'm not waiting on anyone. I can write my posts from where I left it without running into too much trouble. Jess, if you want I can write 'Dean' in - or at least a lead up to gunfire and then the old cliffhanger of 'spotting emerging from the distance/darkness' but if you have something else in mind feel free to write it and I'll write around you. Providing no one kills my two characters off in their posts I can generally work off anything that someone else writes that Rae and David say or do. No biggie.

'preciate it if you'd write Dean in a bit, since I can't come up with a better way to get him into the Park. I can't pick Trinity's story up until he's there. (*facepalm* shouldn't've done it like that.)

CancerCowboy · Senior Member 0

will finish my part over the week. I'll try to make it as good as I can but no promises. I know I'm really out of it at the moment and I apologize, I'm so busy at the moment. Sucks not to have time (in some ways)

Ravynlee · ~ ModMother / The Cougar ~ 290

No one's pressuring you Pete, write when you can. As it stands at the moment Jess and I are carrying this, and Brendan as of late. As was said before, because you're not inside The Park (compound) there's no real urgency, meaning you don't hold anyone up yet when you dont post. It's when/if you get 'inside' that regular posting will be more of an issue. And as for perfection, none of us are striving for a Pulitzer sunshine, don't stress yourself

EDIT: Jess, I have something written but have not finished. Don't despair. I'm hoping to finish update by tonight (my time) so you'll have something to at least peruse before your next post - that's the plan anyway. Whiteboard or PM me if you have anything to add =)

-- Edited by Ravynlee on Sunday 10th of May 2009 03:55:16 PM

Ravynlee · ~ ModMother / The Cougar ~ 290

Apologies for the double post - has been a few days since so thought I'd post fresh =)

Jess - not to sure if the Dean I wrote in ties into what you had in mind for him if not I'll ammend, failing that I guess try and work around it. He's met up with us now, feel free to write us returning in to camp however you want, I've left that to your discretion whether you want to have Dean open up about certain facts on how he survived or where he came from on the journey there or if you'll just magically transport us back with Jill and Nick. Your call.

Again, sorry for the delay, I deleted 2 pages that just weren't working for me but I can add that stuff I omitted back in later should I feel that way inclined. Just had to get something up. Hopefully it's something you can work with.

And Brendan, not to sure what you had in mind with your previous story entry so I've left it open now too. Did you want us to hear that gunshot and come looking or did you want to write us fleeing past in your post (or not) ? - That too is open for you as you see fit. Just a thought is all =)

Jess · V.I.P 260

Whew. Post finished. Not totally finished though - I'll have another one for Trinity in a bit. For now it's suppertime.

Ravynlee · ~ ModMother / The Cougar ~ 290

Brilliant! That truly inspired me again - and I was starting to feel 'over it' so thanks!
Will be eagerly awaiting your next update. Won't pen anything more until you do. Want to see where you take this.

Jess · V.I.P 260

Good

I don't want this thing to die. I'm enjoying it, both the reading and the writing. The characters seem much deeper than they were in the original Park - maybe it's just the setting, but anyway. It's fun.

Second post is posted. Quite short, but I think it gets the point across.

Ravynlee · ~ ModMother / The Cougar ~ 290

To be honest the original park was quite sh*te *lol* but then again it was new territory for us so that was to be expected. And this 'post apocalyptic' world is a new genre for me as a writer so I think I embracing it that much more for that very reason. And I have to agree. I'm actually enjoying the complexity of this. It's different. Between us it should survive

BTW kudos on the update. Finally we're getting some 'answers' behind the mystery that is 'Trinity.' Sweet =)

-- Edited by Ravynlee on Sunday 17th of May 2009 03:16:25 PM

Jess · V.I.P 260

Ooh ooh ooh, I get the opportunity to kill off the other fluff character? Yay!

*cough* Ok, tone down the happiness at getting to kill someone. Maybe I won't. After all, he's our only fluff character right now. Which reminds me, why don't we introduce two or three more, who were travelling together and came acros the Park? Give us some more people to kill, I mean, some more stuff to work with. Just an idea. Heck, in honor of LPF's tradition of 'borrowing' muscicians, we could throw in a few more members of Linkin Park.

Anyway, I've got two core characters (Trinity\Jamie and Dean) and Rav has two (Rae and David), and considering their convoluted histories they'll probably give us plenty of entertainment without fluff characaters. But the fluffheads are kind of fun to write, because they can be killed at any time. And that makes me happy.

Oh and another thing, before I forget. Since the Park has all of two caretakers now, in the name of realism it might be a good idea to let the other folks carry weapons as well. I mean, in a community of - what, seven? - only arming two of them when you're in a dangerous setting isn't too smart. I was thinking Jill and Wesker could call a meeting to discuss it and officially arm at least one other person.

Random idea shared, I'll wait for a response before I start writing.

EDIT simply to point out, Jill said Nick was "gone", so anyone wishing to resurrect him could interpret that as him just running off. Jus sayin'.

-- Edited by Jess on Friday 22nd of May 2009 01:43:41 PM

Ravynlee · ~ ModMother / The Cougar ~ 290

You must be reading my mind - and if you are STOP THAT! It's a scary place to be, believe me

But seriously, we must be thinking alike. I deliberately didn't go into detail about what happened to Nick because I had been planning to bring him back at some point, but for now his 'passing' was a good excuse for me to show my two protagonist's ugly sides - Under what capacity I'll write Nick back in down the track is still up for question. I'd been thinking there's an oppertunity here to introduce this idea (or further build on it) that DarknessLover started with rival gangs. Maybe Jill isn't as dependable as we'd all like. Maybe Nick's a snitch. God knows at this point. But yes, I was kind of HOPING you were elluding to that Jess, that he was 'gone' and not 'dead.' In this current climate where death is probably life's only certainty it's easy to see why they'd all assume the worst

As for the meeting, you're spot-on again. My plan was for Jill and Wesker (though Wesker's more the quiet type, Jill's the second in command here behind Jason) to broach this idea about The Park being more 'protected' - my plan was to have them discuss it at the meeting after dinner, because at this point in this current atmosphere it's not hard to concieve a full-fledged mutiny happening and how easily it could happen if David and Trinity/Jamie, Dean and Rae decided to take it upon themselves to throw Jill and Wesker out of power. It could be done. I think Jill and Wesker would have to realise this now. The Park has to band together and to do that this notion of arms for one but not all will only segragate. So yes, if you wish to write that in by all means feel free to do so. I myself haven't had a chance but if you write something along those lines it won't hinder anything I've been thinking about/working on. So all good from me.

And as for fluff characters *lol* I've considered this too. I had been stalling as long as I could for the others (Brendan and Pete) to jump over but am thinking it's time enough. I don't see the problem in bringing in a few more. In fact this could help, not from a writer's point of view, but in a very strategic way, making life just that much harder in a place whose resources are already stretched to the limit (maybe this means we have to send out scouting parties further afar now to get supplies and they'll likely have to camp out in areas away from th erelatve safety of The Park, etc...) A small trickle of people wouldn't hurt - maybe Nick could lead them in? Maybe one of them saw Jason? Lord kows. But yes, if you want to introduce a few more go nuts I say.

And for the record, I didn't 'kill off' Mark at the end of my previous update. I left it 'hanging' (pardon the pun/bad taste I know) because this I thought could be used in other ways. For one thing there's this underlying tension now between Mark and Trinity after she got him in trouble for breaking into Jason's place. We also have this inkling she's some kind of merc for hire so maybe she's taken matters into her own hands. We also have David's alleged homicidal history, and on top of all that we have one very major underlying factor no one's really addressed in this - depression. The world's ended. Things seem overwhelmingly hopeless. People are being picked off every few days like flies. It's a horrid way to live. Maybe he saw no future ahead, clearly his behaviour reaching out to Trinity before her betrayal said something. But anyway I could be reading too much into it. I just wanted to paint a grim kind of picture here, at least a glimpse of it, of how all this crap they're struggling through takes its eventual toll.

Anyway rant over.
Best of luck Jess. Will wait and see what you come up with now before I pen more. Eagerly awaiting it