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chalice of hate

I sip from the chalice of razors
they slip through my lips and tongue
spilling soul and life through the black
crimson that flows from me.

I stand perched,perched upon the edge
of the of sheet of mares..sheets of red
sheets of black..black like night ..black like
eyes

I take the 40 lashs of fire that beat
endlessly against my beaten bruised
cracked flesh of maggots..that crawl like
the worms in my eyes festing on the dead
sight eyeballs of nothing more then black and blind
eyes of nothing more

Me perched perched upon the sheets of mares
red and black..like the eyes of demons staring at me
licking their lips lusting and thristing for my flesh and red
that flows through my veins..

I sip once again from the chalice of razors that slipts
through me like the eyes of sins..the eyes of swords
and demons staring into the soul of Me...of I of nothing
but purity...I am nothing more then a mortal..caught in
there grip of torture..and pure joyment..of hate and hate
is what i shall recieve..

by bex

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Very good! Really deep, very descriptive and violent, I like. I would've wanted to see some more uniqueness and advanced wording on the last two verses/parts but over all everything works together really well. The story is perhaps a bit hard to follow here but then again, that makes you think, so it's not really a con. Not much else to say, good work - write something more happy next time, eh? wink.gif I know from experience that it can be hard when you're used to writing stuff like this but it really helps to look at things from a different perspective.

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thnk, jon

i do have happy stuff but i dont post em much

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No problem, and you definitely should post them then! wink.gif

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"We’ve never tried to come off as better than our fans, our fans... when they come to see us play, they’re actually a part of, you know, us playing. Sonny, the way he is on stage, he connects with them, emotional and in every kind of way you can imagine, you know, musically, and I think that they can see that it’s not, you know, a put on, it’s not something that’s fake, it’s real." -
Mark Daniels of P.O.D.


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